The
experience of being a human being is, lets face it, determined by the façades
we put on: the cars we drive, the clothes we wear, the relationships we have
and we don’t have. The idea of owning these things has become a disease in our
culture. The more we have, the more we want. The more we want, the more we lose
sight of ourselves and allow the material things and the status in life to
dominate the experience of life. Ownership devalues, as humans, our sense of
self and warps the value and meaning of our lives. The falsity of the
entitlement we all feel is rooted in ownership and the greed and immorality it creates.
This cycle
of owning and wanting more, leading to immorality and the desensitizing of what
is valuable is especially prevalent in one of my own cultures- youth. In the
school environment, it is thought that we as individual students earn and own
our grades. In reality, our cleverness is what really owns our merits, not our
own selves. The A, leading to the GPA, leading to the ivy league has become
what defines our self worth, trumping over the honesty of an earned and
unassisted-by-the-writing-on-your-arm grade. The college(s) you are accepted
into have become what defines, as young adults, our self worth; therefore
devaluing the ownership of our own deserved and earned intelligence. Cheating
has become the social norm among many, as seen through the faces in laps and
the insides of desks glowing with the heavenly luminous cell phones during
tests. The falsity of what now appears on report cards is an ownership that
embodies the corruption that is human nature.
Wanting higher grades at any cost, even a falsified one, is
just how ownership leads to greed and the inflation of our sense of self.
The
tangible grade is also serves as an example of the intangible status we own.
Although not all strive to be the best and the brightest, or the wealthiest and
the most indulgent, everyone strives to own some sort of status, whether it be
falsified or not. The extent to which one will go to own this status is what
defines their sense of self, and as it turns out, this extent is quite an
extent. Tumblr (a popular “blogging” site with a young demographic), boasts
“depression” blogs- blogs that feature enigmatic photos of fog and rain and
drug use, something that has become glamorized by John Green books and small
production movies where the girl is fallen in love with because of her sadness
and is wanted for her brokenness. This idea that sadness and pain is romantic
and dreamy is now a status people want to own, which is an obvious way in how
we devalue our sense of self with ownership of the intangible.
Ownership
is something that is inevitable; we own ourselves, our decisions, our morals
and values, and also our desires as a result of the things we own. We strive to
be better than we are (sometimes decided upon by social trends in the example
of “depression blogs”) as a result of ownership, which can, in turn, function to
work against us by devaluing our sense of self.
Olivia,
ReplyDeleteI really really like your blog! Especially the last paragraph I know exactly what you're talking about and agree with it 100%. You have really good diction and I can hear your voice through out the piece. The only suggestion I have is for you to have a clearer definition of what your definition or ownership is. From this I understand that it basically desensitizes us to everything, but maybe you could reinforce that throughout your paragraphs. Otherwise it was well done!
Olivia,
ReplyDeleteThe way your words flow creates a very unique and poetic voice. Your writing amazes me more and more each day. What I liked the most was how strong your ideas are. The intensity in which you speak of the relationship between what is tangible and intangible. It seems that you know your audience very well and I really like how you used grades and college as examples. All in all, well done. Keep it up!
Olivia, you have many wonderful writerly sentences in this blog, starting with the first one. (Anything that begins with the human experience has my attention.) Sometimes the awesome sentences trade-off with ones that are a little wordy, but I see how you're experimenting with an authoritative and poetic voice, so keep experimenting and you'll get all of your sentences as lovely as that first one.
ReplyDeleteI thought your thesis was focused and insightful, if a little depressing. I am shocked and horrified (even though I shouldn't be by now) by the latest Tumblr trends and now must investigate John Green books. So clearly, you use your evidence convincingly and engagingly. Great job culling your experiences for a meaningful, universal-but-specific approach.
In general, your voice is confident, commanding, and engaging--nicely done!