Thursday, October 31, 2013

Social Change Proposal: First Draft


Olivia Melendez
Period 4 APL+C
Social Change Proposal Final Rough Draft

Throughout my career as an inner-city magnet school student, I took for granted the tools that were always at my disposal which guided me in the right direction, the most influential of this being the teachers and administrators who were always there for me, who I confided in, who I respected, and who respected me. Once my friends, also in the magnet program, graduated and went off into our local high schools, many kids who had once been the best and the brightest began to lose their spark. Many got involved with drugs, and many were bounced from school to school as if “How to Get Expelled” were a new elective. Kids who once took pride in being handed their Honor Roll certificate every trimester now looked forward to passing by the skin of their teeth to the next class. There is something disgustingly wrong with this, and it made me think: What is the flaw in the system?

Well, as it turns out, teenagers are highly impressionable. Eighth graders cling to the latest trend like their lives depend on it, and everything you say to them carries weight. From my experiences, I’d say twelve to fourteen years old is when what is said carries the most weight.  

It also turns out that there were 15 murders per 100,000 people in 2012 after a rash of gun violence in Bridgeport, and at least 15 sets of gangs operate in Bridgeport[1]. In fact, Bridgeport has been initiated into the 25 Most Dangerous Cities in America[2] club, an extra curricular I don’t feel is making too positive an impression on our already impressionable youth.
So, what do we do about this? Well, as of now we have great programs and organizations within Bridgeport, like the YMCA and the Cardinal Shehan Center, which do a solid job of giving their participants a constructive environment in which they can participate. But with staggering murder rates and an unfortunate 66.3 percent of the 2012 graduating class of Bridgeport actually graduating, we need a more aggressive program that gets kids right when it matters, that is, the transition from middle to high school. This is a time in which kids really find their personality and friend groups, which can either put them on the right track, or unfortunately, like many others, the wrong.

My idea is to establish a program within these organizations that will act as a sort of mentor system for the kids of the mentioned ages. These teenagers will be partnered up with volunteers who are upper high school age, college age, adults- anyone who can offer positive guidance and support, and also be willing to extend some possible personal experience in the trials and tribulations of growing up faced with adversity- and exchange contact information, arrange meetings, or whatever system feels most comfortable for the mentee, in which they will build a positive relationship where they feel comfortable seeking advice and guidance in navigating the decisions a teen is faced with in developing themselves in one of America’s most dangerous cities.

Such a program would be extremely beneficial for those kids who don’t have access to positive adult figures in their personal lives, or even teachers like I did. They can now have someone who they feel comfortable considering their confidant, and by encouraging successful high school upperclassmen and college age young adults to volunteer as the mentors, teens will be more responsive, as they feel more of a connection to someone who has recently been through what they are facing and who they can more closely relate to. This will result in kids wanting to willingly participate in the program, rather than being forced.

By adopting such a system, our local organizations aimed at bettering the lives of our youth would see a plethora of success stories. I know personally that if some of my close friends had had such an opportunity available to them going into high school, then they wouldn’t have the questionable future they now have almost graduating. Kids can build relationships which will help them to stay on the right track, and having someone to seek help from when navigating through the confusing transition to becoming a young adult can make or break an individuals situation, as I’ve come to find out is essential through my own personal experience with the transition.

So rather than uniting as a community to accept our new titles as among the “Most Dangerous Cities” or other less than flattering names, lets come together to give our youth the tools they need to contribute to turning that name into “Most Safe City”, or “City With the Most Opportunity”. I propose our local youth organizations adapt this idea of a mentoring system and see the need for it. Because really, I would much rather the next generation of our community to be known for 15 out of every 100,000 going out into the greater world as positive representations of Bridgeport, contributing new ideas that began to fester when they sought out someone to guide them while they were young, rather than the current 15 per every 100,000 people being murdered because they lacked the guidance to sustain a positive output.




To be sent to the local newspapers for (hopefully) publishing

Sunday, October 27, 2013

Proposal: The Guidelines

-Improving programs for inner-city teens
-Audience: Bridgeport community
-Speaker: Myself (establish ethos by talking about how I have seen how these programs would be beneficial and how without them kids end up going onto the wrong path)
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Relationship: We need better programs for inner-cty teens within the Bridgeport community, which I have noticed needs to be improved through going to school in Bridgeport and my relationship with people who would have benefitted from such a program.

-Genre of Argument:  Open conversation with the Bridgeport community published in the local city newspaper

-Purpose: To lay down the groundwork for a positive future for teens transitioning from middle to high school.

-Argument of Proposal

-Major Claim/Plan: As a community we need to improve the programs for our youth so that they will want to participate and it will be constructive and successful in keeping them out of violence, drugs, bad stuff in general.

-Ethos: I have seen how these would be beneficial and what happens without them or when they arent successful (the programs), pathos to drive people to action and make it more personal, logos- how often is this happening? is this really needed? how are they not successful? rates? specific instances?

-Major changes (so far), I think I may now point out how existing programs need to be improved rather than proposing to create entirely new programs


Wednesday, October 23, 2013

Social Change: Argument of Proposal




Ali Rajohn Eric Henderson: Fourteen years old and a freshman in high school, well, should have been. Henderson was murdered before he could start the school year. He was involved with drugs. He was involved with gangs. He was involved with guns. He was impressionable.

You see, Henderson was a part of the critical age group- middle school into high school- in which transitions are inevitable and decisions begin to shape the person you’ll be for good. Teens become young adults and young adults choose who they want to become. In large cities like Newark, where Henderson was from, street violence and, as a result, murder are becoming an epidemic among young people, and little is being done about it. Communities rally for vigils to grieve the loss of their young people, but what do they do in order to prevent it?

Well, right now, I see very little preventative measures being taken to avoid situations of lives being cut too short from happening. What is direly needed are programs that young adults want to participate in, which are fun and constructive, and places and people available to them that can keep them on the right track toward a bright future. So many young minds are lost to the temptation of drugs and gang violence simply because they have nothing better to do or nowhere else to turn. Young adults of the impressionable ages of twelve through fifteen need a positive outlet in which they are encouraged and praised for putting out constructive things into their communities, and we as communities need to realize we have a responsibility to our youth to provide them with this.

Within our communities, there are so many wonderful individuals who can contribute to the future of these teens, just simply by offering themselves as mentors, speaking about their careers, helping host events, and many other simple things that can contribute to a better climate overall. Establishing places where kids can go to hang out or participate in something, or people who kids can confide in and seek advice from would, can, and needs to be a crucial element in the shaping of them as individuals. By providing youth with a positive influence and an exposure to opportunities they wouldn’t have otherwise been exposed to, we can work toward lowering the violence and related tragedies as a result of the lack of support for these young adults.  
So, let’s get together as a community and put together programs and opportunities (college tours, socials, games, classes, etc.) for our youth, and maybe someday by doing so we will never have to gather to grieve a tragedy like Henderson ever again, but rather, we will be gathering to praise the success of the kids whose lives we've changed. 



Source/More about Henderson's Case: http://www.nj.com/essex/index.ssf/2013/09/newark_teen_tied_to_gangs_drugs_is_murdered_before_his_first_day_of_high_school.html 

Sunday, October 20, 2013

Toulmin Analysis

Analysis of my Pathos blog:

Major Claim(s)
- "I believe we need more community outreach programs for inner-city teens, ones which they will actually want to be a part of."
- "we need to come up with solutions to get teens off the streets and into a more positive, encouraging environment. "
- To sum it up, my major claim for this piece would have to be that there need to be more opportunities and programs for inner-city teens. This is a major claim because it is my solution to the problem of tragedies among inner-city youth and the product of all my reasons leading up (too many deaths, kids don't realize their full potential, etc. later pointed out in this post) 

Data

- No data, whoops

Warrants (I'm still a little unsure about these)

- I believe my warrant(s) would be that by creating more programs and opportunities for kids, we will see better outcomes within our communities and from these kids. Creating better opportunities = better things from our youth 
- Our priorities as a community should lie in our youth 


Backing

- Communities are affected deeply when tragedies happen among our youth, and have a sort of strength, but are not concentrating their efforts in the right things. 
- Youth are unaware of their worth, restricting them from reaching their full potential. 
- "I can guarantee you we would have a more productive, positive, innovative, successful society. I know that if at a younger age I had been given opportunities to participate in my community, and  to have been a part of something positive, I would have formed lasting relationships and found my way in life (which I still am realizing) a little earlier."
- "I can't imagine the number of times I've seen an incoherent mother crying on News 12, seeking justice for her 16 year old son who was the vicim of a hit-and-run, or her 13 year old daughter who was caught in the crossfire" 
- My backing, because this is the pathos blog, is all more pathos driven. Also, I use ethos as a backing because I identify myself as a part of this group, building my trust as the speaker. 

Rebuttal

- I don't have too solid of a rebuttal, but in a sense I address that some might be wary of my ideas because they require funding- something that is hard to come by these days. If elaborated upon, I feel this would become a decent rebuttal, as this would probably be the first opposition from local government.


Qualifiers

I use "guarantee" a lot, which is kind of a stretch for a qualifier, but it ties into my ethos of being a part of the group that I am seeking change for, which qualifies both my ethos and the experience I am using as  my backing. The use of "guarantee" almost serves as a definite that if we provide kids with these programs, they will succeed. 




Okay, now a more formal version



This blog begins with the authors major claim, which is that she believes there need to be more opportunities and programs for inner-city teens. This is a major claim because it is her solution to the problem of tragedies among inner-city youth and the product of all her reasons leading up (too many deaths, kids don't realize their full potential, etc. later pointed out in this post). "I believe we need more community outreach programs for inner-city teens, ones which they will actually want to be a part of."


The writers ethos works as my backing, as they make clear that they am a part of the community that 
needs help and they identify with the age group. "because I see such a sense of community in my city"


She also uses her ethos as a backing by building her trust as a speaker. Because the speaker is a part of this group, she knows about such tragedies and how it affects communities first-hand. "I can't imagine the number of times I've seen an incoherent mother crying on News 12, seeking justice for her 16 year old son who was the vicim of a hit-and-run, or her 13 year old daughter who was caught in the crossfire" 


Also, the author uses pathos as a vehicle for their backing primarily, as this was a pathos geared blog. By stating things such as "I can guarantee you we would have a more productive, positive, innovative, successful society. I know that if at a younger age I had been given opportunities to participate in my community, and  to have been a part of something positive, I would have formed lasting relationships and found my way in life (which I still am realizing) a little earlier," readers can identify and understand how beneficial these programs would be. Also by using more obvious pathos, as when she says "The mothers sobbing on TV, the candles and balloons lined along street corners, the wholehearted teddybear shrines, the innocent, young lives gone in the blink of an eye, and the communities and families left to cope are exactly what I never want to see, ever again," leads the reader to feel an emotional response toward the cause and hopefully see that it is something worth going forward with. 


In relation to the backing, there is no data to support the claims. This piece would be improved and more driven had there been an inclusion of data. 
I believe the warrant(s) would be that by creating more programs and opportunities for kids, there will be better outcomes within such inner-city communities and from the youth being targeted. In essence, creating better opportunities equals better things from the youth. 


The qualifiers are more of a stretch, but there is a  use of "guarantee" a lot, which ties into the writer's ethos of being a part of the group that they are seeking change for. This qualifies both her ethos and the experience she is using as  her backing. The use of "guarantee" almost serves as a definite that if youth can be provided with these programs, they will succeed.  



There is  not a solid rebuttal, but in a sense they address that some might be wary of their ideas because they require funding- something that is hard to come by these days. If elaborated upon, I feel this would become a decent rebuttal, as this would probably be the first opposition from local government.