Toulmin Analysis

Analysis of my Pathos blog:

Major Claim(s)
- "I believe we need more community outreach programs for inner-city teens, ones which they will actually want to be a part of."
- "we need to come up with solutions to get teens off the streets and into a more positive, encouraging environment. "
- To sum it up, my major claim for this piece would have to be that there need to be more opportunities and programs for inner-city teens. This is a major claim because it is my solution to the problem of tragedies among inner-city youth and the product of all my reasons leading up (too many deaths, kids don't realize their full potential, etc. later pointed out in this post) 

Data
- No data, whoops

Warrants (I'm still a little unsure about these)
- I believe my warrant(s) would be that by creating more programs and opportunities for kids, we will see better outcomes within our communities and from these kids. Creating better opportunities = better things from our youth 
- Our priorities as a community should lie in our youth 


Backing
- Communities are affected deeply when tragedies happen among our youth, and have a sort of strength, but are not concentrating their efforts in the right things. 
- Youth are unaware of their worth, restricting them from reaching their full potential. 
- "I can guarantee you we would have a more productive, positive, innovative, successful society. I know that if at a younger age I had been given opportunities to participate in my community, and  to have been a part of something positive, I would have formed lasting relationships and found my way in life (which I still am realizing) a little earlier."
- "I can't imagine the number of times I've seen an incoherent mother crying on News 12, seeking justice for her 16 year old son who was the vicim of a hit-and-run, or her 13 year old daughter who was caught in the crossfire" 
- My backing, because this is the pathos blog, is all more pathos driven. Also, I use ethos as a backing because I identify myself as a part of this group, building my trust as the speaker. 

Rebuttal
- I don't have too solid of a rebuttal, but in a sense I address that some might be wary of my ideas because they require funding- something that is hard to come by these days. If elaborated upon, I feel this would become a decent rebuttal, as this would probably be the first opposition from local government.


Qualifiers
- I use "guarantee" a lot, which is kind of a stretch for a qualifier, but it ties into my ethos of being a part of the group that I am seeking change for, which qualifies both my ethos and the experience I am using as  my backing. The use of "guarantee" almost serves as a definite that if we provide kids with these programs, they will succeed. 




Okay, now a more formal version



This blog begins with the authors major claim, which is that she believes there need to be more opportunities and programs for inner-city teens. This is a major claim because it is her solution to the problem of tragedies among inner-city youth and the product of all her reasons leading up (too many deaths, kids don't realize their full potential, etc. later pointed out in this post). "I believe we need more community outreach programs for inner-city teens, ones which they will actually want to be a part of."


The writers ethos works as my backing, as they make clear that they am a part of the community that 
needs help and they identify with the age group. "because I see such a sense of community in my city"


She also uses her ethos as a backing by building her trust as a speaker. Because the speaker is a part of this group, she knows about such tragedies and how it affects communities first-hand. "I can't imagine the number of times I've seen an incoherent mother crying on News 12, seeking justice for her 16 year old son who was the vicim of a hit-and-run, or her 13 year old daughter who was caught in the crossfire" 


Also, the author uses pathos as a vehicle for their backing primarily, as this was a pathos geared blog. By stating things such as "I can guarantee you we would have a more productive, positive, innovative, successful society. I know that if at a younger age I had been given opportunities to participate in my community, and  to have been a part of something positive, I would have formed lasting relationships and found my way in life (which I still am realizing) a little earlier," readers can identify and understand how beneficial these programs would be. Also by using more obvious pathos, as when she says "The mothers sobbing on TV, the candles and balloons lined along street corners, the wholehearted teddybear shrines, the innocent, young lives gone in the blink of an eye, and the communities and families left to cope are exactly what I never want to see, ever again," leads the reader to feel an emotional response toward the cause and hopefully see that it is something worth going forward with. 


In relation to the backing, there is no data to support the claims. This piece would be improved and more driven had there been an inclusion of data. 
I believe the warrant(s) would be that by creating more programs and opportunities for kids, there will be better outcomes within such inner-city communities and from the youth being targeted. In essence, creating better opportunities equals better things from the youth. 


The qualifiers are more of a stretch, but there is a  use of "guarantee" a lot, which ties into the writer's ethos of being a part of the group that they are seeking change for. This qualifies both her ethos and the experience she is using as  her backing. The use of "guarantee" almost serves as a definite that if youth can be provided with these programs, they will succeed.  



There is  not a solid rebuttal, but in a sense they address that some might be wary of their ideas because they require funding- something that is hard to come by these days. If elaborated upon, I feel this would become a decent rebuttal, as this would probably be the first opposition from local government.